Hey PJFan! Just got done reading your story and thought I might share some constructive criticism

I'll start with the good! Some of the dialoging that you wrote was witty and cute. Some things Iago said really sounded like him, and Sadira was very well characterized! The story itself is short and cute, and I could tell you had fun writing it!

But what happened to Sadira's deep thoughts about what she was doing? Did they just disappear out of nowhere? Stealing is presented as a bad thing throughout the entire story and then, in the end, the characters are happy for their accomplishment.

I also didn't understand what went on between the young girl and Dhandi. Is this a sequel to another work of yours? Because some things not referenced in Disney's portrayals, including Jasmine's children and Sadira's parents, seemed to have popped out of nowhere with no real background. And what does "froidary" mean? :P

Thank you for writing! Sorry this review is so long. I try to be as helpful as possible when leaving constructive criticism. Cute story! :)